Peer Assessment / New Storyboard

Our work was shown to the class and peer assessed, from this is was evident that we had a lot to change in order to make our opening title sequence good. There were so many faults we found with it that we decided to change the location and many other things. For example, we've decided not to show the interview now, and instead have it on the radio whilst the man who wants to kill the Prime Minister is doing things like reading the paper on the economical collapse and assembling a gun etc.

We need to keep in mind many things like holding the shots for longer so we can edit them if needed. This is because we found that our current draft is too quick.

In order to grasp the concept of our new ideas we have made another storyboard to follow.

 1. This shows the radio being turned on and the Prime Minister's interview will be playing aloud. Next will be a title.
2. There will be an establishing shot of the murderer sitting on the edge of his bed reading the paper and then a close up of the article which will be a political crisis
3. The murderer planning to kill the PM, scratches a picture of the PM's face out and then closes the newspaper angrily
4. He then gets out his diary and reads it (The diary will explain his motives to kill the PM) and after that he will pack his briefcase, ready for 'work'
5.The next shot will be him telling his wife he's going to work and walking out the house with his briefcase, followed by another title
6. There will be a shot of the murderer approaching the gates of his house to leave and then another title
7. He will then purchase a ticket for London and wait for the train 
8. There will be a shot of him sitting on the train and a close up of his face with him stroking his chin, our aim is to make this bit mysterious and intense
9. We will have a close up of him tapping his foot to connote his impatience and after that another title
10.Next there will be a close up of the 'westminister' train station sign to give the audience an idea of where he is, and this will be followed by a shot of him in amongst a busy crowd
11. There will be a shot of iconic landmarks etc like the London eye, Big Ben and things like red tour buses and black cabs to portray the horror of him being free to roam around London being as dangerous as he is, and then next another title.
12. Then there will be an establishing shot of the houses of parliament and a shot of Callum (The man wanting to murder the PM) from behind watching the houses of parliament as if he has another ulterior motive than wanting to visit it as a tourist attraction
13. One of the last shots will be him looking at his watch as if waiting/anticipating something significant to happen.

Overall, I am happy with the new storyboard as I'm not happy with our current draft and I think starting again will make it a lot better. Aswell as this I feel I am able to justify what shots we have chosen to film and why, whereas before I couldn't really justify some of the shots, I just put them in to fill a gap.